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I woke up with Gladys Knight and the Pips singing in my head... 
2nd-May-2010 08:39 am
Loz Cola
Not sure if anyone's remotely interested, but if you are;

Pick a paragraph from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

My fics can almost universally be found here (which also contains me wibbling about writing) or my LoM fics from 2006-2008 can be found here, and I really need to sort out a better fic index, as well as upload fic to various archives, and tag my fic on lifein1973.
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1st-May-2010 11:37 pm (UTC)
From this fic which I so rudely never commented upon(I adore it, btw):

George has somehow become a permanent fixture in his life. If he's honest with himself, she's his best friend; but he doesn't say that to the boys with whom he attends school. She's not the kind who enjoys wearing the dresses she turns up in. Sooner than not, she begs for a pair of Gene's newly washed shorts and tucks the hem of her skirt into it. They walk along the canal and throw rocks, and Gene calls George an array of different boys' names, just because he can. One day she's Steve, the next she's Jack, and Gene forgets she is a girl most weeks. There's nothing ladylike about her; she prefers meccano over dollhouses, and can burp God Save the Queen; a feat which impressed Gene the first time, has revolted him in others, and bores him to tears after the thirty-fifth rendition.
2nd-May-2010 02:05 am (UTC)
Hee! I have a huge soft spot for that fic.

To me, Gene seems to be attracted to people who are different --- people who buck the conventions of the times they live in. The people he most likes and trusts challenge him; his perceptions, his opinions. So I could easily see Gene falling for a tomboy. And George is the tomboy of all tomboys. I wouldn't be surprised if she read one of the Famous Five books and threw it at the wall because George Kirrin wasn't tomboyish enough.

I always thought the Roger Whittaker line and his protectiveness about that cop who hit on her shows Gene as being really very fond of his wife, even if she's never named. And, when I'm not slashing, I like the idea that Gene and his wife (as of LoM) are good friends as well as husband and wife. If Gene doesn't care for someone, he doesn't give them the time of day. The "Gene calls George an array of different boys' names" comes, of course, from Gene calling Sam girls' names, and it's something I always wanted him to do with Alex, but he never has. He likes to highlight how very different George is from how she should be, because he loves that about her.

I'm still not entirely happy with the formality of "with whom" in the second sentence. I wasn't happy when I wrote it, and it jars now. I couldn't think of another way of saying it, so it stuck. But I do like that George has burped 'God Save the Queen' so often Gene's sick of it.
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2nd-May-2010 12:53 pm (UTC)
Oh, man. This is probably one of my cruelest endings, because it's a mock button reset.

My intention was to lure anyone reading into a false sense of security --- have it seem like Sam had now learnt his lesson and Gene and Annie were still standing by him, despite his douchebaggery. I wanted to suggest that it had all been a dream, a horrible, terrible nightmare, and now everything was right with the world.

But the very last line of dialogue reveals that, actually, this is just another layer of text on top of all the others --- it's one of the three lines I used to show that reality was not reality, that parts of the multiple texts incorporated in the palimpsest of Sam's life were written hard enough to exist as part of each text --- and any second, it could rub away and reveal the lie of that life. Sam has no redemption for his douchebaggery, he had his chance and he fucked it up.

The end.

Now I am curious as to what your ideas are. I am a writer who does not mind at all if they don't coincide with mine.

Edited at 2010-05-02 12:55 pm (UTC)
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2nd-May-2010 01:45 pm (UTC)
I don't generally like stories that have endings that spring from seemingly nowhere. I like twists in the tail, sure, but only ones that make some kind of sense, so that you can look back and go 'oh, oh, of course'. So, like you, I'm usually quite good at predicting resolutions, though I do appreciate it when I've missed something.

It was meant to be a 'Sam is a bastard' story. I was somewhat irrationally angry towards him writing most of the story. I hated him for what he did to Ruth. I hated him for his selfish indulgence in choosing fantasy. I hated that I got that, knew why he'd done what he'd done, that I'd never seen the problems with how it would affect Ruth before. I'd had the basic idea since mid-2006, but in an entirely different form (as a romantic comedy, no less.) Then I saw the potential of it as being, well, what it is. When it came to actually writing it, it was ten days of fitting it together whilst seething.

I felt better about Sam after I wrote it, and after then, I've never written a story purely to punish him. I've still written a couple of rather horrible stories, because that's how my mind works, but they were out-and-out horror, and you were meant to be 'on his side'.

I really love Sam, despite, and sometimes because of his flaws. I sometimes feel bad about the fact that it's not really a button reset at the end of Palimpsest.
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2nd-May-2010 04:34 pm (UTC) - What Was That???
From this particular fic
Then there are those moments, like today, when the light is glinting off Sam’s eyes, and he’s had one of his episodes, and there’s been a murder – and Chris can’t help but think Sam might have done it. He feels guilty. After all, the boss is whiter than white, isn’t he?

But you hear about these stories, don’t you? The smooth manipulator. It’s always the nice guy, the one you don’t expect – and who’d expect Mr. Moral to be a murderer? Chris, that’s who.
Betcha you didn't think I'd pick that particular one, did you?! *G*

(I've still got to go back and answer ours from ages ago - I've got to rope Fi into helping, though!)
3rd-May-2010 07:48 am (UTC)
I wanted to establish that there's a naivety in Chris' reaction there, it's an instinctive understanding and observation of Sam. And I also wanted that insecurity, that Chris isn't sure, he just thinks it's a possibility (and realises he's the only one who does.)

I also wanted to highlight how very dark and disturbing Sam can be on occasion. There are certain expressions he has that are quite creepy, really.

As for the whole fic, I'd toyed with the idea for a while, and then Jillybean posted her dark!Sam story and I thought 'why not go for it?' So I did! And I enjoyed it immensely. I do think there's a very real possibility that Sam could have cracked and gone properly insane during Life on Mars. Part of me sometimes thinks it's a shame he never did. I always like playing with that.

:D
2nd-May-2010 10:01 pm (UTC)
<Sam goes mad on Sunday
-- from Keep Me Hanging On
3rd-May-2010 07:54 am (UTC)
That was only ever meant to be a facetious, off-the-cuff joke. I didn't truly mean it literally, just that Sam's stuck with Gene as a ghost by his side for ever and ever, by the looks of it, and that'd be enough to drive anyone bonkers. But most readers took it as being literal, so the humour diminished somewhat. :D

I do not even know why I decided to write that story, but it's one of my very, very favourites, so I am glad I did. I guess I just like the idea that not even death could be the end of Gene.
3rd-May-2010 11:37 pm (UTC)
I'm so glad I asked, because I had no idea! I'm one of the ones who took it literally!

I'm glad you wrote it, too. It's one of my favourites of yours.
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